Lyrics grammar! HELP XD

Posts : 28 Join date : 2010-01-05

You are born with a pure heart to the world
You do not know what awaits you beyond your mother's arms.
When you grow up, parents lead you through life,
You get to know the world, the riddles and mysteries.

Belong to music, whether we want this or not
It's our heart, our lives and what we want out of life

You can make fun of us, despise and avoid
We know what we can, we gonna reach the whole world
we'll be playing everything will show us the sky
Cold air brings us a lyric

Belong to music, whether we want this or not
It's our heart, our lives and what we want out of life
We will play together, no matter where and how
With the help of God we will conquer the heavens

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Could you guys check my grammar lol? its gona be song lyric, and please tell me if its fine.

~Sodian

Subject: Re: Lyrics grammar! HELP XD Mon Jan 25, 2010 11:07 am

To me it looks fine (not an expert)
And when you finish that song, post it!! Very Happy

Posts : 686 Join date : 2009-12-03

Some spelling mistakes but since youre asking for grammar

everything seems fine c:
i dont think you need commas after each line, but idk.

Posts : 28 Join date : 2010-01-05

Could you please show me them? ;D

Posts : 686 Join date : 2009-12-03

Uhm.
actually just forget it. everything's fine.
music can really be anything lol.